It is a few weeks ago before I realized that my poems had not good rhythms. So, I edited them. And now, they are better.
Please read this poem aloud.
The Monster
One sunny day, I escaped from school.
I met a monster which was starting to drool.
It looked at me and licked its lips
and used its hands to grab my hips.
It stared at me and rubbed its tummy.
It licked its lips; then it said, “Yummy!”
I stared at it and perspired in fear
as the monster smiled and shook its rear.
It tossed me high up to the air;
I thought I was having a nightmare.
I screamed a scream and blinked a blink
as I fell into its mouth which really stink.
The monster tasted me and said, “Yucky!”
It spat me out; I was quite lucky.
I flew out of the monster’s mouth
like a cannonball; I was heading south.
I thought it would be my last,
but I landed at the entrance of my class.
And because I escaped from my school,
my teacher whacked me like a fool.
Haha…Now read this poem aloud
The Monster
One day, when I escaped from class,
I met a monster that was crass.
It looked at me and licked its lips
and used its hands to grab my hips.
It stared at me and rubbed its tummy.
It licked its lips; then it said, “Yummy!”
I stared at it and gasped in fear.
The monster smiled and shook its rear.
It tossed me high up to the air;
It was like having a nightmare.
I was afraid, that’s why I yelled
while falling in its mouth which smelled.
It tasted me and then said, “Yucky!”
It spat me out; I was quite lucky.
I flew out of the monster’s mouth,
like a cannonball, heading south.
I thought that it would be my last,
but I fell at the door of class.
Because I escaped from my school,
my teacher whacked me like a fool.
Well, doesn’t it sound better than the last one?
That is because I ‘rhythmized‘ it, making it nicer to read than the last version of the poem.
Last time, I didn’t know about that because I thought that my poems already had a rhythm. I tend to read some verses faster and some slower, making me think that they were okay.
Later, I’ll come up with an article, very soon
‘How to Rhythmize and Rhyme Your Poems’.
So, don’t forget to check back!